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PostPosted: Thu Jun 08, 2006 7:47 pm 
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Ingame text will include books, pamphlets, documents, and notes. Most texts will be at most 2-3 pages of writing. Both fiction and "non-fiction" will be included.

Add ingame text to the wiki in the correct category here, at which point other people can proofread, edit, and make comments on the relevant talk page:
http://perceptioncrash.sourceforge.net/ ... ngame_Text

If you mention something that may make a major change to the game world from something that has been previously discussed, please put "NOT FINALIZED" at the top of the page.

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 1:13 am 
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Should we have a kind of enigmatic message at the beginning of the game? Y'know, like:

What we percieve is a limited thing.
We, all of us, live on in a blissful ignorance.
Is it a blessing or a curse, that our own minds cannot correlate their contents?
When the day fades to shadow, should we shine a light on that which piques curiosity?
For what we percieve can come crashing down onto either our limits, or onto us.
When perception crashes, is it by will or chance that some withstand it?

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 1:24 am 
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Raikoh wrote:
Should we have a kind of enigmatic message at the beginning of the game? Y'know, like:

What we percieve is a limited thing.
We, all of us, live on in a blissful ignorance.
Is it a blessing or a curse, that our own minds cannot correlate their contents?
When the day fades to shadow, should we shine a light on that which piques curiosity?
For what we percieve can come crashing down onto either our limits, or onto us.
When perception crashes, is it by will or chance that some withstand it?

Cool idea. Perhaps wikify it somehow.

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 2:33 am 
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A little over the top. I'd simplify it a bit. Good first cut though.

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 2:45 am 
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I wrote another document:
http://perceptioncrash.sourceforge.net/ ... /CHARON-73

Tiak said he would write something like this, so I assume he did this:
http://perceptioncrash.sourceforge.net/ ... _Article_2

His is pretty good, I'd have to say.

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 3:00 am 
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Pretty good stuff so far.

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 2:52 pm 
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T-1 wrote:


Nice! 8)

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Tiak said he would write something like this, so I assume he did this:
http://perceptioncrash.sourceforge.net/ ... _Article_2

His is pretty good, I'd have to say.


I'd have to agree. :)

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 9:57 pm 
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T-1 wrote:
I wrote another document:
http://perceptioncrash.sourceforge.net/ ... /CHARON-73

Tiak said he would write something like this, so I assume he did this:
http://perceptioncrash.sourceforge.net/ ... _Article_2

His is pretty good, I'd have to say.


Well, It's good and all, but that is not the way newspaper articles are written. I write for school newspaper, I'd be willing to write news articles for you guys.


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PostPosted: Fri Jun 09, 2006 10:44 pm 
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What would you do differently?

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PostPosted: Sat Jun 10, 2006 10:34 am 
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T-1 wrote:
What would you do differently?


Well, it doesn't have the proper lead, there is one parargraph, while paragraphs in the news only have about 3 or 4 sentences max, they did the quotes incorrectly, it contains opinion, doesn't use acroynms correctly, horrible attributions, ect, ect, ect...

Well, I guess it's not bad if you just want to have a bit of text instead of a news article. If I turned that in for our publication I would get an F :P .


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Sounds like you volunteered to rewrite it. Go for it. 8) ;)

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Machaira wrote:
Sounds like you volunteered to rewrite it. Go for it. 8) ;)


Okay, I fixed the things I think were a problem. I tried to remain as true to the content of the original as possible.


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PostPosted: Sat Jun 10, 2006 3:11 pm 
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I don't see why this part was an issue:
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Public knowledge of where a cornerstone of this country lies poses a threat to all the people of the country, and we have decided that excessive military budgets for our defence are wasteful. Thusly, this move ensures efficient spending and continued government through a relay of decisions. We look forward to a time when we can be restored to our former offices, but it's simply not practical

The politician said it, not the newspaper.

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T-1 wrote:
I don't see why this part was an issue:
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Public knowledge of where a cornerstone of this country lies poses a threat to all the people of the country, and we have decided that excessive military budgets for our defence are wasteful. Thusly, this move ensures efficient spending and continued government through a relay of decisions. We look forward to a time when we can be restored to our former offices, but it's simply not practical

The politician said it, not the newspaper.


The wuote was already too long, I had to cut it. If you want it back, you can put it back. Why is that important anyways?


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PostPosted: Sat Jun 10, 2006 9:02 pm 
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A question about the newspaper article:

What mysterious events would make a move out of DC necessary? The crash? Why? The major effect was in Nevada and wasn't a direct attack. The effects of the crash weren't a direct threat against the government. If we're going to keep this, I think we need to clear it up a bit. It sounds good, but doesn't make much sense.

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PostPosted: Sat Jun 10, 2006 10:50 pm 
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Machaira wrote:
A question about the newspaper article:

What mysterious events would make a move out of DC necessary? The crash? Why? The major effect was in Nevada and wasn't a direct attack. The effects of the crash weren't a direct threat against the government. If we're going to keep this, I think we need to clear it up a bit. It sounds good, but doesn't make much sense.


Well, I was thinking that too, but I figured you already worked it out.


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PostPosted: Sat Jun 10, 2006 11:48 pm 
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Machaira wrote:
A question about the newspaper article:

What mysterious events would make a move out of DC necessary? The crash? Why? The major effect was in Nevada and wasn't a direct attack. The effects of the crash weren't a direct threat against the government. If we're going to keep this, I think we need to clear it up a bit. It sounds good, but doesn't make much sense.

I asked Tiak on his opinion on my writings, and this is what lead to him writing that:
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[20:41] Tiak: ORACLE-51 is especially nice, the others would be largely visual
[20:41] T-1: visual?
[20:41] Tiak: Well, for example, like the flier, the text alone doesn't really describe what it'd be
[20:42] T-1: what what is like?
[20:43] T-1: you mean, it doesn't sound like a flier?
[20:45] Tiak: No, I just mean it's more aof a visial thing so just the text of it doesn't really do it justice.
[20:45] T-1: ahhh
[20:45] T-1: you mean, we need to show Psions being oppressed?
[20:46] T-1: well, I would figure that we would do that anyway
[20:46] T-1: we want to show things on many levels
[20:47] Tiak: Hmm, thinking about the newspaper article now though...
[20:47] Tiak: People still listen to Senators?...
[20:48] Tiak: I mean if things are going into a state of martial law, and anti-psionic propaganda is everywhere, you'd figure there'd be senators/reps that didn't want to go along
[20:48] T-1: yeah, there would be
[20:48] Tiak: so them being in contact with the press might be a bad thing for the government...
[20:49] T-1: but he's not one of them
[20:49] T-1: they'd keep a few puppets up
[20:49] T-1: to reassure people
[20:49] Tiak: That makes sense I suppose
[20:49] Tiak: What should we do with them in general though?
[20:49] T-1: besides, te TF leader can egokineticise people into believing they're doing the right thing
[20:50] Tiak: Right now I'm thinking that soon after the perception crash they and their families were sent to live in a "secure location" for their safety to fullfill their duties
[20:50] Tiak: and the only comments that get out, the martial law government wants to get out
[20:50] T-1: sounds like a good idea
[20:51] T-1: write a newspaper article about it :P

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Well, there's the semi-hidden reason of keeping all of the politicans from the world view, so no one really opposes the government, a move towards a more military-oriented government. But there's also the cover reasons... Contact was recently lost with a LARGE portion of land, the area is spreading, communications are fading away, riots are taking place, and I'd assume when we get to this point psionic-human relations are at the point where the TF becomes necisary. So I'd expect a widespread fear of them, and terrorist activities from them from the more evilish psionics that news has reached people of.

So yeah, rioting, fear of terrorist attack from unarmed citizens (maybe a failed attack in the past?), and most importantly the urge to pull a palpatine all factor in.


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PostPosted: Thu Dec 28, 2006 5:36 pm 
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we should put excerpts from various texts that are out of copyright like Sun Tzu on the Art of War.

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How would that be worked into the story? Who would be having The Art of War just laying around?


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